Chapter 5: page 95

30th Dec 2018, 8:27 AM in Chapter 5
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Chapter 5: page 95
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68bears 30th Dec 2018, 8:27 AM edit delete
wow that was a long hiatus, huh
wouldnt say im completely back tho!
as ive said before im not gonna quit this story and im gonna finish it until the end.
ive just had a lot of things to do the past few months or i just didnt have energy to update
anyway thanks for sticking around guys(if u have)


ShoShone 31st Jan 2019, 3:34 AM edit delete reply
Yeah, looks that way. You weren't entirely back. That's how it goes.

I very much like your art style. But it seems at times you use like fifteen panels to show activity where two or three would do. You took 15 pages to get a character out the door in the morning. Don't get caught up in so much minutiae or unwarranted tedium. You need to work on moving the storyline along faster with less work. When a character hits the shower before going to bed you don't have to show so much activity for that. Let the reader surmise a few things. Summarize. Cut down on panel usage for unimportant things and save it for matters more relevant to story development. After 95 pages the story should be somewhat further along.

And this has nothing to do with calling you lazy or saying you take too much time away on hiatus. I don't know you or anything about what you've got going on in your life. Whatever it is that's what it is. I'm just trying to give you a hint to be more economical with panel and page usage for whatever time you do have here. I hope this isn't a bother but is of some help. 8u)
68bears 27th Feb 2019, 4:26 PM edit delete reply
thanks for the tips
the amount of panel usage always stresses me out, and at the time when i started it i was pretty serious about getting into comics and looked up how to do better but there was so many contradictions i just did everything lmao

but now im pretty lax and i dont wanna get into comics professionally anymore which is why im updating pretty slowly now
ShoShone 28th Feb 2019, 2:31 AM edit delete reply
Hey, whatever you got going on that's what it is.